I have interviewed some of my friend and this is the opinion about their preference regarding Music, Food and Gadget
Music
Based on survey, concluded that teenagers have some music preference such as hip-hop, pop, k-pop, rock etc. Most of them prefer the music from abroad because they think that Indonesians music is not better than abroad, but they sure in the future the domestic music will have capability to compete the music from abroad.
Food
Currently teenagers are like Indonesian and foreign food, but they prefer Indonesian food, because Indonesian foods more spicy
Gadget
These days most teenagers want to have "dream gadgets" such as iPad, iPod touch and galaxy tab. But in fact most of them still use blackberry because it has better communication facility than other gadget, such as BBM (blackberry messenger) that the user of blackberry can communicate "unlimited" each other .
Rayhan Sri Bayu N XB (34)
Hi there, I would like to comment your writing. In the first paragraph you wrote 'some of my friend' without s. You supposed to add 's' at the end of 'friend', because there are more than a friend, right?
ReplyDeleteAnd in the second paragraph you wrote 'Most of them are prefer', it should be no 'are'. But I think you were just missed that thing because in the other paragraph you wrote the same sentence correctly.
Your grammar is good. Your paragraph are good too because when I read that, I easily get your point. But, please check your capital letters. When you write 'indonesian' the 'i' should be capitalize.
So after all your writing is good. But, can you use another sentence except 'based on survey'? You wrote that as the opening of paragraph 2, 3, and 4. Maybe you could change that into something different but have same meanings. Good luck!
-Nadia Khairunnisa XB-